Do You Flee?

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Moses was trying to help his people with his own strength. Sure, he had the all the wisdom of Egypt. He <span caption="Review this sentence for use of the passive voice" class="PassiveVoice alert" critical="true" description="

Ensure you have not overused the passive voice in your work.

This sentence is written in the passive voice; consider changing it to the active voice. The passive voice refers to the subject receiving the action; the active voice refers to the subject doing the action. While the passive voice is perfectly acceptable in formal writing, it may not effectively persuade the reader. In modern society, people are often convinced by facts; the active voice sounds more like a fact, or a certainty.

Incorrect: Rules are often broken by rebellious teenagers.
Grammatically, this sentence is correct; however, it is more forceful to use the active voice: Rebellious teenagers often break rules.

Incorrect: It has been demonstrated by scientists that smoking causes cancer.
This sentence is more convincing if written in the active voice: Scientists have demonstrated that smoking causes cancer.

N.B. The passive voice should be used in cases where the information is unknown, irrelevant, or should not be mentioned (i.e. when being subtle). It is also used when writing in an impersonal manner to avoid use of pronouns.

Correct: The bowl was broken in the scuffle.
This sentence could replace an accusative sentence, such as “She broke the bowl!”. Use of the passive voice may also put the emphasis where it is most needed:

Correct: It is thought that Shakespeare may have been a group of writers rather than a single author.

” grammarpoint=”Passive voice used where active is more appropriate” name=”” sentence=”He was well educated.” style=”background-color: white; color: #191c1e; font-family: ‘Trebuchet MS’; font-size: 13px; line-height: 19px;”>was well educated<span caption="Review this sentence for comma splices." class="Punctuation alert" critical="true" description="

Ensure there are no comma splices separating two independent clauses.

If two independent clauses are to be joined into one sentence, they must be separated by a conjunction or a semi-colon. They may also be separated into two sentences by a period. Clearly identify the independent clauses in your sentence, and decide how they may best be separated.

Incorrect: Koala bears are not actually bears, they are marsupials.
The two independent clauses, “koala bears are not actually bears” and “they are marsupials” should be separated by a semi-colon.

Incorrect: I am not angry with you, I am not happy with you, either.
The two independent clauses, “I am not angry with you” and “I am not happy with you”, could be separated into two sentences by a period, or they could be joined with a conjunction such as “but”.

Exceptions:

Comma splices may be used for artistic or poetic effect, as when one is connecting several short independent clauses:
She was beautiful, she was gorgeous, she was ravishing.

Comma splices may also be used if the two independent clauses are somehow contrasting, as when following a statement with a question:
You are coming to the party, aren’t you?

” grammarpoint=”Comma splice separates two independent clauses instead of conjunction or semicolon.” name=”Punctuation/CommaSplice/CommaSplice/Case3″ patterndate=”1330690594000″ sentence=”He was nursed by his own Israelite mother (chances are, baby Moses grew up listening to Jewish stories and stories about God).” shortdescription=”

Ensure there are no comma splices separating two independent clauses.

Incorrect: Koala bears are not actually bears, they are marsupials.
Correct: Koala bears are not actually bears; they are marsupials.
Exceptions: poetic effect and contrasting independent clauses
Correct: She was beautiful, she was gorgeous, she was ravishing.
Correct: You are coming to the party, aren’t you?

” style=”background-color: white; color: #191c1e; font-family: ‘Trebuchet MS’; font-size: 13px; line-height: 19px;”>He <span caption="Review this sentence for use of the passive voice" class="PassiveVoice alert" critical="true" description="

Ensure you have not overused the passive voice in your work.

This sentence is written in the passive voice; consider changing it to the active voice. The passive voice refers to the subject receiving the action; the active voice refers to the subject doing the action. While the passive voice is perfectly acceptable in formal writing, it may not effectively persuade the reader. In modern society, people are often convinced by facts; the active voice sounds more like a fact, or a certainty.

Incorrect: Rules are often broken by rebellious teenagers.
Grammatically, this sentence is correct; however, it is more forceful to use the active voice: Rebellious teenagers often break rules.

Incorrect: It has been demonstrated by scientists that smoking causes cancer.
This sentence is more convincing if written in the active voice: Scientists have demonstrated that smoking causes cancer.

N.B. The passive voice should be used in cases where the information is unknown, irrelevant, or should not be mentioned (i.e. when being subtle). It is also used when writing in an impersonal manner to avoid use of pronouns.

Correct: The bowl was broken in the scuffle.
This sentence could replace an accusative sentence, such as “She broke the bowl!”. Use of the passive voice may also put the emphasis where it is most needed:

Correct: It is thought that Shakespeare may have been a group of writers rather than a single author.

” grammarpoint=”Passive voice used where active is more appropriate” name=”” sentence=”He was nursed by his own Israelite mother (chances are, baby Moses grew up listening to Jewish stories and stories about God).”>was nursed by his own Israelite mother (chances are, baby Moses grew up listening to Jewish stories and stories about God). He had the best of both worlds. He had a passion. He wanted to help. He <span caption="Review this sentence for use of the passive voice" class="PassiveVoice alert" critical="true" description="

Ensure you have not overused the passive voice in your work.

This sentence is written in the passive voice; consider changing it to the active voice. The passive voice refers to the subject receiving the action; the active voice refers to the subject doing the action. While the passive voice is perfectly acceptable in formal writing, it may not effectively persuade the reader. In modern society, people are often convinced by facts; the active voice sounds more like a fact, or a certainty.

Incorrect: Rules are often broken by rebellious teenagers.
Grammatically, this sentence is correct; however, it is more forceful to use the active voice: Rebellious teenagers often break rules.

Incorrect: It has been demonstrated by scientists that smoking causes cancer.
This sentence is more convincing if written in the active voice: Scientists have demonstrated that smoking causes cancer.

N.B. The passive voice should be used in cases where the information is unknown, irrelevant, or should not be mentioned (i.e. when being subtle). It is also used when writing in an impersonal manner to avoid use of pronouns.

Correct: The bowl was broken in the scuffle.
This sentence could replace an accusative sentence, such as “She broke the bowl!”. Use of the passive voice may also put the emphasis where it is most needed:

Correct: It is thought that Shakespeare may have been a group of writers rather than a single author.

” grammarpoint=”Passive voice used where active is more appropriate” name=”” sentence=”He was concerned.” style=”background-color: white; color: #191c1e; font-family: ‘Trebuchet MS’; font-size: 13px; line-height: 19px;”>was concerned<span caption="Review this sentence for academic writing style." class="Style alert" critical="true" description="

So,” may not be in an acceptable position for academic writing. Please read the following, and consider changing your word or phrase to something more formal.

In academic writing, “due to”, “therefore”, and “so” are generally not used at the beginning of a sentence, because they generally refer to a cause-and-effect situation. They may be used in the middle of a sentence, to begin a second clause.

Incorrect: Due to a power failure, the cafeteria will not be open today.

Correct: The cafeteria will not be open today, due to a power failure.

” grammarpoint=””Due to” may not be acceptable for academic writing.” name=”Style/UsingDuetoinAcademicWriting/UsingDuetoinAcademicWriting/1277960″ patterndate=”1330690594000″ sentence=”So, he went out and looked at the hard labors of his people.” shortdescription=”

So,” may not be in an acceptable position for academic writing.

Incorrect: Due to a power failure, the cafeteria will not be open today.
Correct: The cafeteria will not be open today, due to a power failure.

” style=”background-color: white; color: #191c1e; font-family: ‘Trebuchet MS’; font-size: 13px; line-height: 19px;”>So, he went out and looked at the hard labors of his people.
He <span caption="Review this sentence for use of the passive voice" class="PassiveVoice alert" critical="true" description="

Ensure you have not overused the passive voice in your work.

This sentence is written in the passive voice; consider changing it to the active voice. The passive voice refers to the subject receiving the action; the active voice refers to the subject doing the action. While the passive voice is perfectly acceptable in formal writing, it may not effectively persuade the reader. In modern society, people are often convinced by facts; the active voice sounds more like a fact, or a certainty.

Incorrect: Rules are often broken by rebellious teenagers.
Grammatically, this sentence is correct; however, it is more forceful to use the active voice: Rebellious teenagers often break rules.

Incorrect: It has been demonstrated by scientists that smoking causes cancer.
This sentence is more convincing if written in the active voice: Scientists have demonstrated that smoking causes cancer.

N.B. The passive voice should be used in cases where the information is unknown, irrelevant, or should not be mentioned (i.e. when being subtle). It is also used when writing in an impersonal manner to avoid use of pronouns.

Correct: The bowl was broken in the scuffle.
This sentence could replace an accusative sentence, such as “She broke the bowl!”. Use of the passive voice may also put the emphasis where it is most needed:

Correct: It is thought that Shakespeare may have been a group of writers rather than a single author.

” grammarpoint=”Passive voice used where active is more appropriate” name=”” sentence=”He was set out redeeming in his own strength.” style=”background-color: white; color: #191c1e; font-family: ‘Trebuchet MS’; font-size: 13px; line-height: 19px;”>was set out redeeming in his own strength. All he knew was to do what the flesh would do. The flesh always try to redeem by burying (getting rid of the problem, not dealing with it in truth). So did Moses. He killed the egyptian who was mistreating his people and buried him.

Next day he went to his own people. He thought that, his own people would realize that God was using him to rescue them, but they did not. They questioned the authority of Moses, and Moses ran away from them. Moses knew what he had done the previous day, had become known.

Years later, Moses would stand up to 2 million people questioning his authority, his own sister and brother questioning him and he would not flee, he is not disappointed! What happened to Moses? This Moses who had an encounter with God was not working or redeeming in the strength of his flesh. He had seen God; he knew who sent him. He knew who he was serving. The book of Daniel in chapter 11:32 says,” but the people who know their God will display strength and take action.” Through the 40 years in Midian, shepherding the flocks of his father-in-law, Moses <span caption="Review this sentence for use of the passive voice" class="PassiveVoice alert" critical="true" description="

Ensure you have not overused the passive voice in your work.

This sentence is written in the passive voice; consider changing it to the active voice. The passive voice refers to the subject receiving the action; the active voice refers to the subject doing the action. While the passive voice is perfectly acceptable in formal writing, it may not effectively persuade the reader. In modern society, people are often convinced by facts; the active voice sounds more like a fact, or a certainty.

Incorrect: Rules are often broken by rebellious teenagers.
Grammatically, this sentence is correct; however, it is more forceful to use the active voice: Rebellious teenagers often break rules.

Incorrect: It has been demonstrated by scientists that smoking causes cancer.
This sentence is more convincing if written in the active voice: Scientists have demonstrated that smoking causes cancer.

N.B. The passive voice should be used in cases where the information is unknown, irrelevant, or should not be mentioned (i.e. when being subtle). It is also used when writing in an impersonal manner to avoid use of pronouns.

Correct: The bowl was broken in the scuffle.
This sentence could replace an accusative sentence, such as “She broke the bowl!”. Use of the passive voice may also put the emphasis where it is most needed:

Correct: It is thought that Shakespeare may have been a group of writers rather than a single author.

” grammarpoint=”Passive voice used where active is more appropriate” name=”” sentence=”Through the 40 years in Midian, shepherding the flocks of his father-in-law, Moses was being broken and redeemed by God.” style=”background-color: white; color: #191c1e; font-family: ‘Trebuchet MS’; font-size: 13px; line-height: 19px;”>was being broken and redeemed by God. He was “knowing” his God. Now, there will not be any fleeing.

I have a tendency to flee too when life throws resistance on me. I would love to duck and hide and have no one hear from me anymore. I do not do well under pressure and resistance. The grace of God sometimes puts me right through that resistance and helps me to grow in knowing God more. Staying right there, not fleeing, looking to God, I learn something more about His boundaries defined for me. <span caption="Review this sentence for squinting modifiers." class="ConfusingModifiers alert" critical="true" description="

The modifier “in my very weakness” may be defining either clause in your sentence and is therefore a squinting modifier. Make sure it is clear which clause is being modified by this word.

When there are two clauses with a modifier in between them, it is sometimes unclear as to which clause is being modified. The problem can generally be fixed by moving the modifier.

Incorrect: While talking in his ear quietly she slid the money out of his pocket.
It is unclear if “quietly” is modifying “while talking in his ear” or “she slid the money out of his pocket”. The modifier “quietly” should be moved in front of “slid” or “talking”.

Incorrect: Maintaining a sizeable nest egg frequently protects you from financial tragedies.
This sentence may be better if rewritten: “By maintaining a sizeable nest egg, you are frequently protected from financial tragedies.”

” grammarpoint=”Modifier may define either clause in sentence and is a squinting modifier.” name=”ConfusingModifiers/SquintingModifier/SquintingModifier/SquintingModifierWithPreposition” patterndate=”1330690594000″ sentence=”I learn how His grace is enough to sustain me within those boundaries, that God may be glorified in my very weakness to remain there.” shortdescription=”

The modifier “in my very weakness” may be defining either clause in your sentence and is therefore a squinting modifier. Make sure it is clear which clause is being modified by this word.

Incorrect: Maintaining a sizeable nest egg frequently protects you from financial tragedies.
Correct: By maintaining a sizeable nest egg, you are frequently protected from financial tragedies.

” style=”background-color: white; color: #191c1e; font-family: ‘Trebuchet MS’; font-size: 13px; line-height: 19px;”>I learn how His grace is enough to sustain me within those boundaries, that God may be glorified in my very weakness to remain there.

<span caption="Review this sentence for academic writing style." class="Style alert" critical="true" description="

So,” may not be in an acceptable position for academic writing. Please read the following, and consider changing your word or phrase to something more formal.

In academic writing, “due to”, “therefore”, and “so” are generally not used at the beginning of a sentence, because they generally refer to a cause-and-effect situation. They may be used in the middle of a sentence, to begin a second clause.

Incorrect: Due to a power failure, the cafeteria will not be open today.

Correct: The cafeteria will not be open today, due to a power failure.

” grammarpoint=””Due to” may not be acceptable for academic writing.” name=”Style/UsingDuetoinAcademicWriting/UsingDuetoinAcademicWriting/1277960″ patterndate=”1330690594000″ sentence=”So, if something is pressing you, throwing resistance at you, will you pray to know God more through this?” shortdescription=”

So,” may not be in an acceptable position for academic writing.

Incorrect: Due to a power failure, the cafeteria will not be open today.
Correct: The cafeteria will not be open today, due to a power failure.

” style=”background-color: white; color: #191c1e; font-family: ‘Trebuchet MS’; font-size: 13px; line-height: 19px;”>So, if something is pressing <span caption="Review this sentence for personal pronouns" class="Style alert" critical="true" description="

The personal pronoun, “you”, may not be appropriate for formal writing. Consider removing this pronoun, and rephrasing your sentence.

Formal writing should be impersonal, so personal pronouns – possessive or otherwise- are generally not used. Personal pronouns (i.e. I, you, we, my, mine, your, yours, our, ours) assume the information in your writing applies only to specific readers. By using impersonal pronouns (he, she, one, they, his, him, her, one’s, their), any reader may make their own personal connections to the information being discussed.

Hint: replace you, I and we with one, and replace my, mine, yours and ours with one’s.

Incorrect: When you add 3 and 4, you should get 7.
The personal pronoun, “you”, should not be used in formal writing.

The sentence may be rephrased so it remains impersonal:
Correct: When 3 and 4 are added, the result should be 7.

Alternatively, “you” may be replaced with “one”:
Correct: When one adds 3 and 4, one should get 7.

Incorrect: I believe this point of view is correct.
When one is permitted to express and opinion (only in personal or opinion essays), the use of “I” is still considered too informal; it may be replaced with “this writer” or “this author”.

Correct: This writer believes this point of view is correct.

” grammarpoint=”Personal pronoun may not be appropriate for formal or academic writing.” name=”Style/PersonalPronouninAcademicWriting/Informalpronouns/2064384″ patterndate=”1330690594000″ sentence=”So, if something is pressing you, throwing resistance at you, will you pray to know God more through this?”>you, throwing resistance at you, will you pray to know God more through this? His knowledge will translate as strength <span caption="Review this sentence for personal pronouns" class="Style alert" critical="true" description="

The personal pronoun, “you”, may not be appropriate for formal writing. Consider removing this pronoun, and rephrasing your sentence.

Formal writing should be impersonal, so personal pronouns – possessive or otherwise- are generally not used. Personal pronouns (i.e. I, you, we, my, mine, your, yours, our, ours) assume the information in your writing applies only to specific readers. By using impersonal pronouns (he, she, one, they, his, him, her, one’s, their), any reader may make their own personal connections to the information being discussed.

Hint: replace you, I and we with one, and replace my, mine, yours and ours with one’s.

Incorrect: When you add 3 and 4, you should get 7.
The personal pronoun, “you”, should not be used in formal writing.

The sentence may be rephrased so it remains impersonal:
Correct: When 3 and 4 are added, the result should be 7.

Alternatively, “you” may be replaced with “one”:
Correct: When one adds 3 and 4, one should get 7.

Incorrect: I believe this point of view is correct.
When one is permitted to express and opinion (only in personal or opinion essays), the use of “I” is still considered too informal; it may be replaced with “this writer” or “this author”.

Correct: This writer believes this point of view is correct.

” grammarpoint=”Personal pronoun may not be appropriate for formal or academic writing.” name=”Style/PersonalPronouninAcademicWriting/Informalpronouns/2064384″ patterndate=”1330690594000″ sentence=”His knowledge will translate as strength you need to tarry and take action.” style=”background-color: white; color: #191c1e; font-family: ‘Trebuchet MS’; font-size: 13px; line-height: 19px;”>you need to tarry and take action.

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